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It's all Fun and Games -Pokepasta-

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This pasta has been moved to my new account, godduma! Go read it there c:
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I really don't like the way you ended it. I mean, think of Missingno.'s Eevee. (Abandoned L.) Red- problem starts. Silver- Returns, and the problem stretches on all the way to Platinum. Starting a new game should mean a whole new chapter to your story, not the end. Also I think the pace was a bit too fast. Besides that it's really good! Well, I gave some constructive Crit. So, how bout you tell me how I can improve? [link]